Forum - View topicFor the fans of Elfen Lied...
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BaronNoir
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I watched Elfen Lied, and actually quite liked it (and actually much more for the story than anything else)
So, in a wave of enthousiasm, I started a fiction about it, and would want to have democratic (you can bash it !) opinions on it...Here is the very start of it (one page) Like Elfen Lied, it's certainly not For Everyone, but there is not much direct violence and absolutely not hentai Lucy had inflicted much, much pain....Everyone in the piece knew it very well. Still, it was hard to not have pity for her...Even Nana, who had much reason to hate her to the highest point, was talking to her kindly, to support her. (On this point, it was quite eery...) It was certain that both her lives had been...incredibly violent up to this point, and for them, it was kinda...normal...those things...This was recalling to Yuka and Mayu very frightening recent memories, about Nana, who was looking so...kind, gentle, that this was truly abominable... They had shivered when Nana had said to them, in numerous occasions, in conversation tone, that she was enjoying very much living here, as she had not to be tortured almost each day. Then followed sometimes a description, that was giving nightmares to Yuka, of some of her days in that hellish lab. For instance, that Daddy had been nice with her, in the morning, and said that she was really a good girl...while she was installed on an vertical operation «table», no able to move, even slightly, one of her limbs...That he warned her that what woud follow would harm her a bit, but that this was necessary. That he had even told this day one of his assistants to not be so rough with her (It could have be seen as very ironic that a man that was about to...torture, this was the word...her for hours could say, very serious, to of his assistants to be respectful with Nana. But...this was not ironic. This was sick. This was not funny. This was horrible) And that he left the room, for let the experience to begin... This was this time something to check her resistance to hypothermy. They had filled the room with icy water, that make her heart almost stop as soon as it reached her ankles....Ten hours in cold water up to her neck, completly immobile, in darkness (And this one experience was actually speakable, which was not the case of numerous others) She then said to the horrified Yuka, in a not too convinced voice, that this was not too bad, as she was thinking during this time to happier things, like the few times, when she was really nice, that Daddy let her free for an half-hour...That all this time, she was hearing technicians chating while monitoring her, not saying «her», but «it», which was really hurting her deeply....That when she was fainting because it was really too cold, they brutally put her back to her senses with injections, as it was necessary that she was conscious. That they only removed the water when her heart really stopped, and that the shocks they gave to restart it were really painful. And that Daddy had thanked her to not have cried too much during the process (To cry ? The normal reaction of an alive and sentient being, Human or Diclonius, would have be to go mad...But those «scientists» needed somewhat stable guinea pigs...As Diclonius were really not like rats in a labo...When they were pushed to their limits, they killed everything in sight. So, their minds had to be kept in an at least functionning order...), saying that this was good for everyone (Not her included, of course) It was because some scientists had still some stange feelings, like thinking that it was maybe wrong to do such awful things to...to what was still poor girls, that had in many case comitted no other sin than being born. So, if one «Number» cried during the process, it was harder for the morale of everyone. When the scientists saw the Diclonius more or less accept theirs fates, the tiny hint of conscience remaining in their heads disapeared...Nana had even to be cooperative for her own destruction....And the worst thing was that she was actually playing the game. (As Nana was a smart, sensible girl...it was very probable that she was somewhat aware of the truth, but preferred to think the things in a more positive way, for remains sane...) And that, when Kurama had saw that she was shivering tremendously, he add handed her a blanket to warm her a bit, before ordering to chain her back in Cell Number Seven. For Nana, it had been a somewhat good day, after all... And Yuka had to listen to things like that, and not scream the truth, that Kurama was a madman, toying with her for get her cooperation, as Nana reacted with tears when someone talked badly of her «Daddy», who was indeed very kind with her...when compared to the others, that’s it...She really hoped that Nana would a day accept the truth... Lucy, throught clenched teeths, hissed to Yuka to continue, and to finish it quickly... This prompted the three others females, Diclonius or Humans, to return to the present... |
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ANN_Bamboo
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^^;; Sorry, we don't allow that kind of stuff here. However, I'll leave it so people can email or PM you with comments if they want.
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